This acrostic poem is written from the perspective of a mother with a child who is getting a cochlear implant.
“Caden as a profound sensorineural hearing loss,” the audiologist said. Luckily he
has the
Opportunity to hear with this device. They told us
Children with his type of loss can benefit from cochlear implants.
Hoping this is what he would want if he could decide. We are
Learning
Everthing we can
About the surgery, device, and what step we take next. We
Realize and hope we are doing what’s best for our son.
Intervention as soon as possible is vital.
Many factors help with the success of the implant;
Particularly the age of implantation and how
Long the implant is used (Connor, Craig, Raudenbush, Heavner, & Zwolan, 2006).
Acting now, rather than later is very important.
Not an instant fix, but it gives hope
To all of us, and most importantly
Success for Caden to hear soon.
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Good poem! I think you did a good job of conveying the mother’s worries.
Comment by Lacie Deeds — October 10, 2006 @ 7:26 pm
1. Voice: Whose voice is this piece in?
This piece is in the parent’s (mother’s) voice.
2. Audience: Who is this piece written for?
This piece is written for other parents and clinicians.
3. Say Back: What do you think the author is saying with this piece? (not what do you think they mean to say, but what are they actually saying)
The author is discussing the risks that parent’s feel while pondering whether or not they should have their child implanted. The author is letting the audience know that parent’s want their children to leave a normal life, but is implantation what their child would want. There are many questions when considering a cochlear implant for you child.
4. Bless: Find something specific in each piece that you can “bless.” You might like the originality of an idea, a particular word used, whatever.
I really like this poem because it is from the parent’s point of view. Many times parents are seeking help from professionals, but I think this is good information for other parent’s. Professionals can just suggest what’s best, but other parents truly live and understand the hardships of having a deaf child.
5. Address: Find something specific in each piece that the author should “address.” Make this something that will actually improve the quality of the piece…your group mates are counting on you to help them make their work stronger (just like you are counting on them).
I think your poem is great! I know that you have “hopes” for the child after implantation, but maybe you could add more positive outcomes for after the surgery. We have learned that most children who get implanted do live a pretty normal hearing life, other than the sound sounds different but at least they can hear. So, even though parents do worry and “hope” for the best maybe you could look at it as after surgery he “will (more than likely) be able to do…
Comment by arfalbo — October 13, 2006 @ 2:57 pm
1. Voice: This poem is written in the voice of a mother whose child is about to receive a cochlear implant.
2. Audience: I think the audience for this poem is other parents of children who have/will have cochlear implants and clinicians, especially the child’s specific clinician.
3. Say Back: The author is saying that parents worry about the risks of cochlear implant surgery, even if they know it is what’s best for their children. The author also dicusses a common worry that many parents have before their children become implanted: is this what their child would want if they were old enough to choose?
4. Bless: Like I said in my first comment, I think you did a really great job of conveying all of the mother’s worries. I also like how you said that an implant is not an “instant fix.” I’m sure many people probably think that once you have the implant, you can automatically hear, but it is a long process.
5. Address: In the lines “Leaning on my husband for support, and hoping his Ear will hear some day soon,” it kind of sounds like the mom is hoping her husband’s ear will hear someday soon. Maybe you could say “. . .hoping our son’s ear will hear someday soon.”
Comment by Lacie Deeds — October 14, 2006 @ 9:17 pm
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